Monday, January 04, 2010

Creating Moments

In my most recent script, Zombie, NJ, I tried to make a certain sequence really stand out. I tried to make it a moment to remember. I could have written it pretty easily, a quick scene that gets the characters from Point A to Point B.

But I wanted it to be memorable. Like one of those sequences that you'll remember as your favorite part, sequence or whatever. It's a scene in a crawlspace, the main characters (three 15 year olds) are hiding under the house as zombies rip apart the house above, searching for fresh meat. I tried as best I could to draw out the tension (the horror above them, their current dark & wet surroundings). On the page, I made it last about 2 pages, when it could have been easily half that. It's my favorite scene in the screenplay.

In the last year, we had some fine moments in theaters:

(500) Days Of Summer - You Make My Dreams sequence.

Up In The Air - The scene where they're firing the older employee via teleconference, and he's actually in the adjoining office.

The Hurt Locker - Many moments here, but one that sticks with me is the sniper scene - Bigelow really draws out the drama here. I think the scene was like 15 minutes long, ever wrending second was amazing.

Up - The opening montage.

There are certainly others, but you get my point. When I started writing I didn't pay as much attention to these things, was simply worried about dialogue, structure, story (things we obviously need to worry about!) but after the script reader/agent/assistant/Spielberg puts the script down, you want to give them another reason to pick up the phone.


E.C. Henry said...

Glad to read you're excited about your script. If you can't be, you can't expect anyone else to be.

I too LOVED that "Hall and Oats" song and dance number in the park in "(500) Days of Summer."

- E.C. Henry from Bonney Lake, WA

Patrick J. Rodio said...

Yup, EC, it's good to be excited about it!

manoj said...

Hi,Patrick. I think you have nice creativity in your novels/story's/screenplays. I like the people who always try to put more effort to narrate/direct the scenes very well. And keep the Audience more exciting and Interesting towards the story. You will definitely have a great future ahead Patrick. so keep going.

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